In his first full collection, The Space Between Us (Cinnamon Press,
2018), Neil Elder has produced poems that are limpid and clear in tone and
content. Many readers, poets and critics underestimate the inherent
difficulties and risks involved in writing work of such apparent simplicity:
any slip and the poet is exposed without any paraphernalia to protect
themselves.
As a consequence, there are
inevitably a few failures in this book, but they are far outweighed by its many
achievements. One of the latter is “Like My Daughter Says”:
“If, like my daughter says,
you are now a million particles
orbiting in space,
may you keep on spinning.
Or else as I look out tonight,
I hope you fall like snow
and settle for a while.”
Elder’s language is unassuming in
this poem, and therein lies its strength. There’s no need for him to over-reach
himself in his choice of simile (“like snow”), as he therefore encourages the
reader to focus on the following line, where “for a while”, seemingly so slight
and insubstantial, suddenly charges the whole poem with temporal significance.
A less surefooted poet might have attempted an unexpected, jolting comparison
so as to obtain their effect, instead of allowing their language to grow
organically as in this case.
The most successful poems in The Space Between Us possess an ease and
natural ear for sentence structure. They belie the hard work that must have
been required to chip away until their choice of words felt inevitable and
necessary. Another such example is “In Our Path”:
“There wasn’t anything more we could
do –
the kitten noosed by orange wire lay
dead
against the works where a team had
fixed a leaking pipe.
Before we lay it beneath leaves
in a peaty shallow, you held the
body
with the same care you had cradled
Daniel
on that morning when everything
changed.”
In this instance, Elder deftly
layers insignificant details until they take on new meaning, while also holding
back certain background information in the last line so as to let the poem open
out beyond its ending.
All in all, The Space Between Us represents a strong statement of intent from a
poet who’s brave enough to take on simplicity. Neil Elder’s verse offers us an
excellent counterpoint to the commonplace usage of linguistic fireworks, and I
very much look forward to seeing where he takes it from here.