Received wisdom tends to indicate
that poets should avoid adverbs whenever possible. This is patently absurd: we
need every linguistic tool available. Of course, adverbs can provoke a calamitous
fall, but they can also lift a poem when in the hands of an expert like Mel
Pryor, as she demonstrates on several occasions in her first full collection, Small Nuclear Family (Eyewear Publishing,
2015).
One such example occurs in her
poem “Hokusai”, which portrays a pocket of emotion, as in the following extract:
“Since he upped and left her and
their son
for the printmaker in Tokyo,
I’ve noticed how she curves
forward slightly
like a tall Japanese wave
breaching
the moment between rise and fall…”
Mel Pryor takes her character and
scene, and then homes in on a resonant detail, that afore-mentioned pocket of
emotion. In this case, it’s the way her character curves forward slightly. Implicit restraint, via the adverb, is placed
in juxtaposition to the latent power of the wave.
Here is a further instance of
Pryor’s deft use of adverbs, from “Your girlfriend’s red leather jacket”:
“…my elbow pushing out the hollow
shaped by hers,
and under the top left pocket
with her lipstick in
the beat of my heart fitting
precisely the beat of hers.”
The use of precisely once again lends an extra charge to the verb, while the
final line’s gorgeous cadence mirrors that of a heartbeat, music married to
sense.
And now for a third example, this
time from “Housework”:
“…How glorious, to be held like
that,
his little paunch in the small of
her back,
her hands pulling his hands
against the rolls of her belly,
the warmth of his cheek pressing
through her hair,
and below them laid out messily
in the drawer, the knives, forks
and spoons.”
Pryor celebrates physical imperfection
before underlining her point with messily,
revelling in the counterpoint of an unexpected
partnership between verb and adverb. Via her skilled portrayal of this specific
detail, the poem comes alive.
Mel Pryor’s Small Nuclear Family builds its emotional impact via an idiosyncratic,
delightful blend of approaches that surprises the reader, poem after poem. I’ll
be coming back to it for a long time to come.
Dear Matthew
ReplyDeleteI fully agree with you about Mel Pryor. My own poems are full of adverbs and adjectives and I am not remotely ashamed of the fact!
Best wishes from Simon R. Gladdish